Task
During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you met
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6.0 score.
Dear Sir,
I am Alejandro Garcia, we met last week in a plane journey from London to Manchester. I am writing to tell you that I really want to work in your chain of restaurant because I am not working at the moment and I need some money.
In my last two years I had been working in restaurant as a chef and I have been doing an Indian and an Italian course in a very famous academy. So if I had to choose I would like to be the chef. However, if you already have chefs I wouldn’t have problem to work as a waiter
I think I will be suitable for this job because I am a very responsible person and I have been training very hard to have a possibility like this. Also, I have experience working with other people and how to manage a group.
I hope you would consider my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours fathfully
Alejandro Garcia
Examiner’s Comment
The purpose of the letter is clear, but the tone is not entirely consistent [Dear Sir / I am not working at the moment and I need some money]. All three bullet points are covered quite well, however. Information and ideas are arranged coherently and there is a clear overall progression, with sufficient use of cohesive devices. The range of lexis is adequate and appropriate for the task [I really want to work in your chain of restaurant(s) | working… as a chef | experience working with other people | consider my application]. Spelling is generally accurate. There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and grammatical control is generally accurate.
