Task
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you wound spend your free time while you are in Australia
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7.0 score.
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
My name is Carola. I have seen your advertisement in a magazine and I’m writing to you because I would like to be considered for the position you are offering. I really would like to work for you because I think it will be a good experience for you and me. I like to travel, know about different cultures and meet new people. I have never been to Australia but I’m pretty sure there a lot of thing to see and try. I have previous experience looking after children. Currently I’m working for an Irish family and I take care of for children whose ages vary from three to eight. I have to say that I’ve never thought that looking after children would be that rewarding. I enjoy spending time with them and I have learnt a lot. I’m really patient, tidy, reliable, and hard working.
In addition, I have just qmpleted an first aids course.
If I had the chance to live with you would be great. I would spend my free time learning English, visiting turist attractions, trying local food and making new friends.
Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Please feel free to contact me if you need further details and recomendations.
Kind regards,
Carola
Examiner’s Comment
This answer presents a clear purpose with a consistent, appropriate tone. Each bullet point is clearly highlighted and covered, although there is room for some extension. Information and ideas are logically organised and cohesive devices are used appropriately. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to show some flexibility and precision, as well as use of collocation[the position you are offering | previous experience | rewarding | taking the time to read my letter | contact me | further details]. There are only occasional spelling errors [first aids | tourist | recomendations]. There is a range of complex grammatical structures with frequent error-free sentences.
