Task
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7.0 score.
Some people think that now we can watch movies on gadgets we do not need to attend movie theatre. Some think that to be really liked movies must be seen in a movie theatre. In this essay I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion.
To see films on our tablets and phones there is no need to go to the cinema. On my tablet I see every film I want to see. Also this way is cheap. Each month I pay £9 and I watch many films in my home or on train. If something happen I can stop and do it and later I can watch my film again. I like this and then I fully enjoy it as my stress is not there.
In addition, I like to go the cinema. I like my friends and me to meet up and go to cinema and if I see my boyfriend I like to go to cinema to see a film to gether. Last year on my birthday many friends and me all went to cinema to gether and we watched Deep Water Horizon. I enjoyed this and my friends too, because the big screen showed more information and because the sound quality was better than at home. May be in my house we will not be so happy to watch this film and see the famous actor. Also, we enjoyed the popcorn and coke we could buy.
In conclusion in my house I like to watch films on my tablet. It is cheap and easy for me, but I also like to go to cinema to see films, especially with friends. Maybe both are good to fully enjoy films at different times and with different people.
Examiner’s Comment
The writer addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. Main ideas are put forward, and are extended and supported for each part of the task. Information and ideas are presented logically and there is a clear progression throughout the script. The writer uses a range of cohesive devices [Also | this | In addition | Last year | all | too | this film | In conclusion]. Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which supports the overall sense of progression. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility [movie theatre | movies], to use less common items [gadgets | popcorn] and to show awareness of collocation [meet up | big screen | sound quality | at different times and with different people]. There are only two spelling errors [friends/friends | to gether/together]. There is a variety of complex structures and many sentences are error free. There is also good control of punctuation.
