Task
Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.
What are the reasons for this?
Is this a positive or a negative trend?
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score.
Yes, this is a positive trend, but when you know about that manufacturer company, about their service, quality, quantity etc. If you buy goods from you known brand then it is good for you because you get good product.
Goods are produced in local areas are cheaper than imported gods. There is a big price difference in local and imported goods. All people are not reached so those who are not afford imported goods they automatically turn to local goods.
If you buying any goods from our local brand then the money remain in our area & this is very helpful to make our economy strong. We have to buy only those product that made or produced in our area because it gives money, job to our area.
There are verious froaud companies selling duplicate of first copy imported goods. So this is also the one reason or kind of fear for not buying imported goods. There are verious charges applied when we buy imported goods and for local goods there are no such charges or taxes applied.
Hear I would like to share my experience. I buy a jeans of Lewis brand of rs 4000 after some days the colour of pant become lighter day by day, I feel very bad because I invest 4000 rs on jeans only because Lewis is an imported brand, then I thought if I buy jeans from local area then I get 4 jeans in 4000 & I realised I did mistake & from that day I choose to buy goods that are produced in my local area rather than imported goods.
I suggest you that, I you want to be a part of our developing country then buy goods from our local brands this helps to keep our money in our country.
Examiner’s Comment
This response addresses both parts of the question: the reasons for consumers buying local goods, and whether this is positive or negative. In the first line, we see the writer thinks it is a positive trend. Then reasons are given for buying local goods rather than imported goods: if the product is local, it will be a good product; locally produced goods will be cheaper; the money will remain in the local area, helping the local economy with jobs and money; and buying local will avoid buying fake goods. A personal example is given to illustrate the positive trend. The conclusion is really ‘giving advice’ to consumers to buy local brands to develop their local economy.
There is progression through the response, but linking expressions are largely missing or incorrect [Hear | Here | I suggest you that | I suggest that]. However, cohesive devices are sometimes used well [those who | our | those product that] but can be faulty.
Vocabulary has an adequate range, with some good collocation, [known brand | price difference | no such charges or taxes applied] despite some errors in spelling [verious froaud / various fraud]. There are some examples of complex sentence forms, for example, in the fourth paragraph, but there are quite frequent grammatical errors.
To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present the ideas around the ‘positive and negative trend’ more clearly. Their conclusion should summarise the main arguments, rather than ‘give advice’ to local consumers. They should also demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.
