Task
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6.0 score.
Sharing information is actual issue in our world where it has strong influence on people. There are various spheres of our life where information is more or less important for people working there on out of this. For this reason some people consider that it is good to share information while others think in opposite way.
For example, practically all scientists are glad to share information with ordinary people or other scientist. There is no competition in this sphere. Sometimes it is bad for government which scientist share the secret information with international spy but it will not hurt information.
There are some simple rules in academic world which limite informational sources between people. If person is interested in time discussing with you and you are ready to keep hand, if the person knows much and he knows that you can not give him actual or new information then he will share information with you just for money. For example, student pay for his learning while two students can cooperate and share information with each other. It is obviously that sharing information in business world can followes by releases. There is large competition and it may takes much costs for companies. Companies loose their profit every day because some one can not keep silence especially IT companies.
To sum up all above it is neccessery to say that there are some spheres in which sharing information is a crime. In my opinion, in many cases information can be too important or sharing at all.
Examiner’s Comment
The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt, although there is some misunderstanding of the term shared freely. Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, yet there is not much development of these, especially of sharing ideas in the business world. There is a clear overall progression, with the candidate’s own opinion presented at the end, but there are some errors in the use of cohesive devices [working there on out of this | which scientist]. Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice [actual | releases] and spelling [govenment | limite | theme | loose]. There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy: errors in grammatical control seldom prevent meaning from coming through.
