Task
Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score.
Some people prefer to keep to things that they can or use to. I think it has good side and bad side.
First of all, keep to do same thing make you focus to things. You can learn and enjoy deeply. Also, keep to do same thing makes you comfortable. You can relax to do it. If you have bad day, you don’t need to look for what makes you relax because you already used to do it. For example, you can watch film, visit place, eat food whatever you like or used to. You can go back your routines.
On the other hand, keep to do same thing is avoid your charenge. When you try something that you don’t like or new, it makes you uncomfortable. When you face things that you don’t understand well. It must be scared and uncomfortable and then you have two choices. Charenge or escape. You don’t need to always choose charenge, but you have to ask yourself, is escape good for you?
You need to have confortable time or things like hobbies. It must be good for you. But sometime you have to try to put yourself in unconfortable. It makes you improve and it brings knowledge.
Examiner’s Comment
This response does address the requirements of the question. There are relevant main ideas and an opinion in the concluding paragraph. However, the response is quite repetitive [keep to do same thing] and cohesion is faulty.
Vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there is a limited range with repeated errors in spelling [unconfortable/ uncomfortable | charenge/ challenge]. There are some attempts at complex sentence structures [You don’t need to always choose…but]; otherwise, sentences are short, indicating a lack of complexity. The level of error is significant in this response, including continuous structures [keep to do/ keep doing | you already used to do it/ you are already used to doing it].
This response is below the minimum word count for Task 2. The overall score could be improved if spelling and word choice were more accurate and if there was a wider variety in sentence structures.
