Task
Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?
Candidate’s Answer
This is written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.0 score.
Nowadays, more than million tons of wastes have been being produced which from home everyday and some people claim that not enough of the litters is recycled. Therefore, they think the governments should have a policy to increase recycling.
It is necessary to say that their governments should take action. For example, providing rubbish bag into each family so that separate a litter and make it to have value. Many waste; paper, box or steel from home can sale to governments or decrease council tax. Either, the government should provide junk bank that the citizen can deposit recycled waste and inverse to be some money.
Moreover, the government should have spot advertisement on television to motivate advantages of recycling. In Thailand, my country, we have “3R” advertisement standing For reuse, reduce and recycle and easy example way to do in house such as using less plastics bag (reduce), reuse take away box or sale some paper.
In school, teacher teach children how to recycle waste at home and go back to tell their parent and come back to report their teacher. There is one day a week in order that clean school together which help they have a good attitud in cleaning.
In conclusion, it should be good that the government make some law about waste tax and make people follow the law by give them back some money. Starting give education at school so that when they growth up the will do easier.
In my opinion, it is very easy to government to do as I mention above to reduce waste from homes such as “3R”, junk bank, providing rubbish bins and teaching at school and It will be a good habit and good in long term.
Examiner’s Comment
The candidate expresses a position, but only partially addresses the prompt (he or she considers ways in which people can be encouraged to recycle, rather than explicitly looking at the extent to which laws are required); however, ideas are relevant and are supported with clear examples. There is a clear overall progression and cohesive devices are used effectively, if somewhat mechanically (apart from Either). Paragraphing is just adequate. Lexical range is adequate for the task and there are attempts to use less common items (policy, junk bank, citizen, deposit), but there are errors in word formation (sale/sell, growth/grow up) and some errors in word choice cause difficulty for the reader (inverse to be some money, motivate advantages of recycling). There are attempts to use complex sentence structures, but grammatical errors are frequent (million tons of wastes have been being produced which from home everyday, easy example way to do in house, There is one day a week in order that clean school together which help they have…, Starting give education).
