Task
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Candidate’s Answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.0 score.
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. It’s interesting to the bar chart.
In 15 to 24,, Australian men’s percentage of doing regular physical activity is 52.8 and women’s percentage is 47.7. Compare with men and women, men’s percentage is higher than women’s percentage. However, bars’s changed and interesting. After 25 to 64, men’s percentage are increasing. In 25 to 34, men’s percentage is 42,2.Besides, In 35 to 44, the percentage more decrease until 39.5.
After over 45 age, a few increase like 43.7, 45.1 and 46.7.
However, the percentage couldn’t over 50%.
Then, women’s percentages are increase until 54 age like 52.5, 53.3. Although women’s percentages are decrease after 55 age, the percentages are higher than men’s percentages.
In conclusion, men did regular physical activity more than women when they were teenager and mid twenties.
After mid-twenties, however, men’s percentage was decreased and women’s percentage was increase.
Examiner’s Comment
The candidate covers the key features and rounds off the description with an overview. Organisation is evident, however not wholly logical, and it is sometimes difficult to relate data to specific age groups. Vocabulary is just about adequate, but is rather dependent on input material [regular physical activity | percentage]: original material is limited to e.g. [teenager | mid-twenties] with a lot of inaccuracy in word formation. Most sentence forms consist of simple structures and these are often inaccurate [bars’s changed and interesting | men’s percentage are increasing | the percentage more decrease until], though there is some accuracy in comparative forms [is higher than].
